End of an Era Ep 1

eva_02's soul · 18-03-2002, 06:47 AM

The sun glided upwards in the sky, the start of a new day. In most of the world, birds were singing, and wildlife was abundant. However Magnus saw none of this, to him this day was like any other day in his training ground, the giant wasteland where the mess of the past started. He had been too late to stop his father from ressurecting, and had started a cycle that ended with a showdown of father and son.
That was 6 months ago, and Magnus had been lazy. He wanted his final brother, Cthulu, to catch up with him, needing a greater challenge than the battles of the past. Today was going to be like any other, concentrating for about a halfhour, and then teleporting off to a restaurant, having a meal and getting into a fight. It was all so perfect, he had even met with the human he loved, Kelly, a few times. However, this time was going to be a little different.
Today was the day Cthulu made his move.
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Magnus stood in the middle of his usual spot, his feet sinking slightly into the sand. He closed his eyes, and sent the boulders spinning into the air. He pulled one in towards his body, then teleported behind the second one, which he had flung in from behind. The two rocks collided, as the third one one also missed it's mark and was flung into the pile. All three rocks ground into gravel which Magnus, still holding his eyes closed, disintegrated with a fast flung fireball.

/ This is getting old/ Magnus thought to himself /I need some better training devices/.

As he was thinking, he heard noises coming from around him, vehicle noises. Before long three vans of soldiers had parked up around him, surrounding him. He smirked, as the soldiers formed a tight group around him. The leader, wearing his captain's armor proudly, went up to the still-grinning lizard.

"Errr.. Magnus is it?" The lizard nodded, loving every minute of it. "Well, i've come to arrest you, on behalf of His Divine Technologies, and president Cthulu!" He reached out with handcuffs. Much to the man's surprise, he managed to get the cuffs on without even a bit of violence.

/it's as if he wants them on. no, that can't be right/ Shrugging, he started to lead Magnus back to one of the vans, but the lizard stopped him.

Magnus leaned into the man's face, and continued to grin.
"Did President Cthulu give you any idea what I am?" he asked.
The captain was a little put-off by this, and decided to be forceful.
"Yeah, I know what you are" He said, proudly "you're our prisoner, that's what you are!". Magnus started to laugh, and still laughing, he said. "If that's what you think, then you aren't going to make it out of this wasteland."
The captain was now truly pissed off, and decided to give the lizard a piece of his mind. Angrily, he yelled. "Look, you little punk, you're coming with me, or i'm going to knock you out and drag you with me". With that, the captain reared up to smack the insolent prisoner.
Magnus was tired of the little game, so he ended it. A huge Psi-Blast struck the captain, who flew back through the side of one of the trucks, and back onto the sand, bleeding heavily.
/Now it's time to have some training/ The lizard quickly thought to himself, as he teleported off to the side of one of the platoons, and crushed all of them into each other with another psi-blast, killing most of them instantly. Holding out his manacled hands, he launched fireballs into the second platoon, before jumping up, teleporting in mid-air, and landing next to the final group, who by now were firing wildly, hitting most of their friends in the process. Showing off, he held his hands in front of him and psi-blasted the chain of his handcuffs apart, flinging it into the face of the head of the fourth group, before shooting a light beam from his hands and melting the final members of the once-proud assault force.

Standing in the middle of his handiwork, Magnus looked around. Death and destruction surrounded him. MAgnus smiled.

/Now this is how I remember it, Cthulu must think he's ready. I'll check in on Kelly and then head for HDT/. He looked over to where the captain was lying almost dead on the ground, his life fading fast. Putting on his friendliest grin, he walked over to the man, grabbed him by the neck of his uniform, and slammed his head into the ground.
"I'll tell you what I am." Magnus said, serious. "I'm a prince, and i'm also the last thing you'll ever see". With that, Magnus slid his Iron Spike into the man's brain, and started to walk away.
Just before he teleported, he saw another rock to his right, about his size. Looking at it, he muttured under his breath "I'm sick of rocks" before blasting it into dist and teleporting away.

END OF AN ERA

Magnus decided to teleport himself a little before the Resistance's base, so that it would seem more of a surprise than if he just teleported in. He was wearing his old cloak from when he saved the Earth, and couldn't wait to see Kelly again. As he neared the base, he realized something was wrong, there were no people, no vehicles in the underground garage, nothing. He prepared for the worst as he blew the new security doors off their hinges. He hoped that they were all inside, but the insides of the base confirmed the worst.

/Dead, they're all dead. Damn it!/ He thought, in shock.
Bodies were piled high, some troopers, but mostly resistance, blood smeared the walls from constant gun fights, explosions has scorched the floors and ceilings, some people were still alive, and in a state of constant agony, so Magnus put them out of their misery. He was looking for one body in particular, as he entered the control room where he knew the final stand would've taken place. There were only three bodies here, one was a Trooper, the other was unkown to him, the third was somebody he knew all too well, and he was alive.

"Don! What the hell happened?" Magnus yelled, running over to the wounded officer which helped out during the Divine Shadow's attempt at destruction, and was now lying against a computer bench, bleeding.
He looked up, and seemed to smile. "Magnus....HDT attacked...WE're all dead or dying."
Magnus looked into the eyes of his friend, and said one word.
"Kelly?" Don looked at him, and shook his head.
" I don't know" Magnus hat the bench in anger, then started to get Don to his feet. "Okay" he said " Time to get you some help"
Don seemed to remember something, and then suddenly got very scared. " Magnus, that man, he could still be here."
Magnus went deadly serious, and looked at Don with steel eyes. "What man? Where?" Don was in pain, but still managed it. "The man that led the attack, he was a lizard, he could use your powers. He was why we lost."
Magnus's mouth opened, but he couldn't say anything. Finally, he managed to get out what he wanted to say. "W-what about him?"
Don tried to say something, but whatever it was turned to a scream as a fireball screamed over Magnus's shoulder, hitting Don head on, and ending his life.
Magnus spun around, angry. Cthulu stood there, his outstretched hand still glowing from the power of the ball, he grinned. "I believe he was about to say "he's still in the base" but I feel my way was so much better.
Magnus stared into the eyes of his final brother, and whispered, a frown on his face.
"you son of a -----"

Narrator: and there it gets left, the battles about to start, but has Magnus been too lax recently? How much has Cthulu been training? You'll find out in the next episode of End Of an Era.

Episode 2: Cthulu returns/ battle in the base Coming soon!

Bomberman00004 · 30-03-2002, 01:41 AM

Cool story, as usual. ^_^ Keep it up!

Cetacious · 03-04-2002, 07:07 PM

I understand this is the continuation of a previous fic, right? I haven't read the old one, but I'll keep my eye on this one.
You're style ain't bad. Still you could work a bit on creating atmospheres. You know, some slow scenes and longer descriptions to give the air some more specifical smell(Master: Tolkien; on this board: Hiigaran). You could also get some deeper into your characters' heads. Give the inner monolog a try(Master: Sartre; on this board: Think it's me).
This far it tastes like an action series. I smell pretty much Dragon Ball influence(Sory if I'm mistaken). If you ask me, you could maybe add some more mysteries in the eps to come.
Ctulu... I've heared that name somewhere. It's a Babylonian god or daemon. One of the Primordials from the Necronomicon, I think. Did you actually know that or are you just using that name cause it sounds mean?

eva_02's soul · 04-04-2002, 04:42 AM

I did know that, and I am influenced slightly by Goku and clan. If you want to read the first series, it's called Cluster, but being a dumbass I forgot to save the first 7 episodes onto my comp after writing them, and now they are gone forever.

Usually I write a little better than this, but I have to get back into my "cluster" groove right now, as an action story I feel that inner monologue isn't such a necessity although I do use it sometimes, and I try to keep the action short, sharp, and sweet so as not to bore my readers.