22-10-2000, 12:45 AM
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this is a poem i wrote while watching Lain on DVD.
(New Religion)
Bleek is today
no where is the way your eyes sway.
bluring Possibliltes.
pushing your way throughout my shadow.
Blend into the sun with me
I 'll blesss you today.
Trace the line
follow me to go home.
wondering god.
to find this lonely answer.
never caring for this world.
im sure it will abandon me....
........so..will....I.....
Trying to catch serenity.
trying to clear simitry.
trying not to reach christ.
They say i could leave this place.
they say i could cheat this world.
New religion clearing idenitys.
I will never get it all.
Scared to be you.
to be among discomfort.
Follow me to your flesh.
So i can see what you have to hide.
and the insects that pry inside.
...so i will...
[Edited by jordan on 29-10-2000 at 06:17 AM]
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22-10-2000, 02:49 AM
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A few spelling errors, but nonetheless, very nice.
 sorry that I'm acting like an english teacher...
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22-10-2000, 03:20 AM
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Hmmm, Okay... (kinda creepy) ^_^(_) Neet-O poem or something... 
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22-10-2000, 07:02 PM
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another good one jordan 
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28-10-2000, 10:57 AM
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Nice one jordan!
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30-10-2000, 06:17 PM
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it's kinda spooky but I like it!
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It's been a long time...But I'm Back...Reika the Dark Angel has returned...
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30-10-2000, 07:51 PM
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very good.
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What do you know about tweetle beetles? well.. When tweetle beetles fight it's called a tweetle beetle battle. And when they battle in a puddle it's a tweetle beetle puddle battle. AND when tweetle beetles battle with paddles in a puddle, they call it a tweetle beetle puddle paddle battle. AND... When beetles battle beetles in a puddle paddle battle and the beetle battle puddle is a puddle in a bottle....they call this a tweetle beetle bottle puddle paddle battle muddle. AND..... When beetles fight these battles in a bottle with their paddles and the bottle's on a poodle and the poodle's eating noodles....they call this a muddle puddle tweetle poodle beetle noodle bottle paddle battle.
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02-11-2000, 03:44 PM
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Yeah it is.....
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