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Soldier Moon

Okay, this isn't that good, but this is my first. Oh by the way Throughout the story, I switched Bunny to Usagi and Amy to Naru. (Don't get confused!) Please read and do some serious comments because this story really needs a lot of work. Thanks

SAILOR MOON CHAPTER 1: Daily Routine

SOLDIER OF THE MOON

CHAPTER 1: DAILY ROUTINES

Crystal breaking and China clashing. This was the sound of the Silver Millenium at it's last stand. The barricades of Earth had no longer with-stood the pressure of the evil Queen Metallia. Queen Serenity and her court sent her children to earth after this attack which still no-one knows well enough about. For the child sent to earth is the whole purpose of the story...Her name is Bunny.

"Bunny, time to get up!" A voice is heard in the kitchen as pancakes are starting to be made. The warm aroma of pancakes tells the sleepy girl in bed that it is breakfast time. The girl wakes up lazily in her rabbit-like pajamas. "Coming" she said in a very hoarse voice, hoping that her mother would spare nagging issues. It was then that Bunny did look at the clock after sitting up, half-awake. "AHH! It's 8 O'clock! Why didn't somebody wake me up?" There is hearing of ruffling of bureaus, turning on showers, and the toilet flushing. Downstairs, the Tsukino family is eating their breakfast. The mother, Ikuko is making pancakes. The father, Kenji is drinking his coffee, and Bunny's little brother, Shingo is eating his daily breakfast, Rice-flakes cereal. Rustling is heard from upstairs as feet come down rushing. "Thanks a lot for not waking me up," Bunny wailed in her usual whiney voice. Her father laughed reading the newspaper adjacent to her. "Bunny, you have to realize that you need a new alarm clock, now today, I want you to go buy one. Understand?" Bunny nodded slightly at the re-mark. "Bunny, you're pancakes are ready." The elegant mother with wavy-purple hair and a green apron took the pan from the stove and swaped the pancakes on Bunny's plate. Ikuko then sat down and started talking while Bunny started to munch on the delicious pancakes. Ikuko whispered something to Kenji. "It's almost Bunny's 14th birthday. Don't you think we need to tell her the real story?" Kenji, who was reading the newspaper looked up slightly and said in a louder voice, "Don't worry, every thing is going to be fine." As the parents talked, the sly Shingo stole one of Bunny's pancakes and scarfed it down in front of her face. "You little brat! Mom, Shingo took one of my pancakes again." Ikuko, who was distracted while talking looked at the red clock right behind her. It read 8:15. "Ok, children, hurry up, or you'll be late." Ikuko got up and grabbed two lunch-bags. As well, she took 200 yen (money) out of her purse. Bunny went to go grab her bag while Shingo did the same. Kenji kept on reading the newspaper. When they came back, Ikuko started talking. "Now, Bunny, I made you Yellow-tailed Tuna with no desert after that 20% you got on your last test score." Ikuko's voice went a little angrier. "If I find tests underneath your bed this low, I could always allow Umino to help you out." Those were the words which Bunny dread of. Umino. Umino was the class geek who always got 100% on every single test. Rumor said that if he ever got a 99& or below, his parents would send him to a public school. Bunny grabbed the lunch out of her mother's hand. "You know, I can do better, but math is sooo hard!" "Usagi, I want you to do better!" With that, Usagi put on her shoes and a door-slam was heard. "Don't you think you're being too hard on the girl?" Kenji looked from his newspaper and a pancake hit his face. "EAT!" With that, Kenji read the newspaper reluctantly again. "That girl needs to do better as she should." Kenji got up and kissed Ikuko on the cheek. "I know, but give her time. After all...She is new to the family."

Usagi ran to school as quickly as possible. It was between Katsuya and Mihotesu Ave where it was labeled "Crossroads Junior High." As Usagi was running she was thinking to herself. My mom's name is Ikuko. She has long, wavy purple hair. She doesn't have a job, but works at home. My father's name is Kenji. He works at the local newspaper company as the CEO. He's very prestigious and happy with his work. My evil brother's name is Shingo. He is a little brat. Enough said...Usagi ran across the street when she heard a yell. "Hey!" Usagi looked behind to see her friend Ami Mizuno. Ami Mizuno was the smartest girl in school. She came from a family without her father, and her mother works as the late-shift at Akura Hospital. Her IQ is 300 and she has short, navy blue hair. "Usagi, today is the test." Ami ran up right next to her giggling. "Did you study yet? And before you answer that, let me guess. You didn't right?" Usagi nodded. Ami started to look like Usagi's mother. "Usagi, what have I told you about tests. You need to study! Jeez.." Ami grabbed Usagi's hand, "come on, we're going to be late for class!"

Inside the school was a myriad of images and different signs. When the two girls entered the classroom, they noticed different details of patterns. What was this? It was the painting which the famous upper-classman Michelle Waters created earlier in the year. As the girls reached class just in the knick of time, Professeur Haruna became very upset. "Usagi Tsukino! Why are you late once again? Do I have to ask you to constantly not eat, sleep, or slack off in my class." Usagi looked very embarassed in front of her class. "Why can't you be more like Umino or Naru for once in a while." That word...Umino just ticked off Usagi. He sat in the center of the front row and was the class geek. He has spiked hair with huge glasses. It's just a shame. The girl diagonally left to Usagi is Usagi's friend Naru. She has brown wavy hair which extends to her shoulders, with blue serene eyes. She's pretty smart and get good grades on tests like 85% and higher. That's when Usagi started to wail-when Mrs. Haruna started passing back the tests. "Mrs. Haruna! Why do you have to be so--" Mrs. Haruna stopped Usagi as she extended her arm to reveal a test with a 30% on it. "Usagi, I want you to study harder next time...Until then, I'm giving you double homework and a daily study-session after-school with me. Do you understand?" Usagi barely nodded as tears were about to form in her eyes. She did not want to stay after-school. Just yesterday, she promised Naru that she would go and visit her mom's jewelry store, 'The Bjioux.' And now, she would have to go home, get yelled at, and then afterwords study with Mrs. Haruna all afternoon? How bad could life get. Usagi just sat for the rest of the day in Mrs. Haruna's class. Listening to her discussions. Not taking any notes. As the bell rang, Mrs. Haruna rose from her nearby desk in the corner. "Class is dismissed. You may leave now, except for Mrs. Tsukino Usagi who needs to be staying with me." Everybody left and Naru walked by Usagi, grasping her hand, "everything's going to be ok. I'll still get you those diamond studs." Naru walked out of the classroom casually, as Umino blushed when he went passed Usagi. Usagi watched as Umino stared at her, "Umino, you little per-" "Tsukino Usagi! Sit down at once! I will not accept behaviour of this gratitude from a fine girl like you." That's when Usagi started to cry. Mrs. Haruna looked over from her desk, got up, and walked over to Usagi. Mrs. Haruna's words seemed very strict, but calm. "Usagi...Usagi, I know what your going through. Just take it easy today. I'll let you go early today, but please Usagi, do your homework." Mrs. Haruna smiled. Usagi nodded, picked up her bag from the desk and walked out slowly. As she walked out of the door, Mrs. Haruna stared and went back to her desk. She sat down..."Why am I being so hard on her?"

"Usagi!" Usagi heard a familier voice. It was Naru and she was nearby her mom's store, The Bijoux. "Usagi, there's a sale going on, would you like to try something?" Usagi nodded in disaprooval. "I'm sorry," Usagi looked at the ground, "but I need to get home." Usagi started to run home, Naru looking very concerned as Usagi dashed around the corner. Huffing and Panting, Usagi was almost at her house until she tripped over something. Dazed and confused, Usagi started to get back up, brushed her school clothes, and looked behind her to find a black stray cat. It started to get up, but couldn't move. Usagi walked slowly over to it. "Kitty, are you okay?" She picked up the kitty and dusted it off. She noticed that the cat had a bandage on its forhead. Usagi heard something and looked behind her. "I could have sworn that something was back there." Usagi kneeled, grabbed her bag, and took off again to her house. She slowed down as she came to the enterence and started to walk towards the door.

Usagi's house wasn't that big, but at least it had a cozy feeling. With a front yard surrounded by a 10-foot white wall that glimmered in the sun. Her house was a 2 story colonial decker with white wood and mexican roof-job. As she approached the door, she grasped the golden handle, turned it a bit and it opened with a little creak. Nobody was inside for the lights were dim. "Whew. Thank Goodness mom wasn't here to nag me about my grades." Usagi set her bag down, took off her shoes, put on her slippers, and carried the cat slowly upstairs to her room. Inside was a white walled room with rabbit designs around the place. A bed with Bunny rabbits and a bureau with moon crecents. The desk was across from the room with a computer, and a TV was right in front of the bed with a collection of movies. The coffee table near the entrance had all of Usagi's homework, and the bureau had pictures of realatives and families. It was a quite large room. Usagi walked over past the coffee table to her bed where she put the cat down. "Easy there." Usagi looked at the bandaid. "I wonder why you would have a scar on your forhead." Usagi took the bandaid off, and just like a mummy waking up from a deep sleep, the cats eyes went open, and it immediatly jumped off the bed onto Usagi's drawer. "AHH!" Usagi screamed as she ran to the other side of the room. From the cat was this female like voice. "Now, now, Usagi, why are you so afraid of me?" Usagi turned pale. "A-Aa--a cat is talking to me? This must be a dream." Usagi ran over to her bed and put a pillow over her head. The cat jumped over from the bureau and onto Usagi's bed where she started pushing her. "Usagi, time to get up. I need you help!" Usagi picked the pillow off her head and looked into the cats eyes. "How can you talk?" The cat cleared her throat as Usagi sat up on the bed, intrigued by the cat. "My name is Luna. I've come from the planet Mao where I have been sent for you Usagi." Usagi was wondering what was going to happen. She still listened to the cat anyway. "Usagi, there have been devastating forces working on Earth. I don't know what there up to. It seems as if people have been drained of there energy recently." Usagi interrupted. "Wait, I read it in the newspaper this morning. It said that just recently, a girl down by the street's energy was somehow drained. They found her dead when they got to the crime seen. She looked as if she saw a ghost." Luna nodded and started talking again. What I've been meaning to tell you is that these forces might be conspiricizing things. You cannot be too careful who to trust. I warn you. Becareful about weird people and odd situations such as flashes of black in the distance. Usagi froze. She remembered that she saw a flash of black as she picked up Luna, but didn't say anything. "Usagi, you have been a chosen one. Yes, I know this sounds uncanny, but you have been the one selected. You are---"

The Window from Usagi's room shattered as glass spewed everywhere. A being which looked alien entered the room. It looked as if it had seen a ghost with pale brown skin. It spoke in a very cool voice. "Usagi Tsukino, come with me." Luna jumped up and bit the monster's arm. "Usagi, run!" Usagi opened the door and ran downstairs. The monster slinged Luna off and bashed her against the wall. Usagi was running, put on her shoes and ran out of the door. As she was about to scream, a black void appeared in front of everything else. She was trapped in her own house. Usagi ran and started to panic as she opened many drawers in the kitchen and grabbed a huge kitchen knife. She then hid in the cubard where the sink was. Slowly, the house seemed quiet. Usagi was breathing hard, but tried to control herself. She started to calm down as she heard big footsteps coming down from the stairs. It was the same monster. And it was that same voice. "Come out Usagi. You cannot hide from me. I need your energy. You are a potential threat by having so much sappy-love from your friends." The monster touched her foot on the floor as she went into the kitchen. "Give me your energy, and you will live happy in our 'dark' kingdom." The monster went passed the cubard, and Usagi did something she thought she's never do. She kicked the cubard door open. The monster was about to turn around when Usagi got fully out, stood up and stabbed the monster in the head as it fully turned around. Usagi started to run back upstairs, but tripped trying to get up on the stair. The monster started wailing, "You little witch! How dare you do this to me. Usagi started to get on her feet. "I will get you for this now." The monster took the knife out of it's head and threw it at Usagi. "Ahh," Usagi started to run back upstairs. She went to her room quickly, now mostly shattered glass lay around and grabbed Luna. Usagi ran back and noticed the monster was coming up the stairs. "Give me your energy, now." The monster started to run as Usagi ran upstairs to the attic. Carrying Luna, she opened the window and started to walk on the roof. She ran to the edge of the roof and looked down, grasping Luna. "Luna, wake up. Tell me what I need to do." She shook Luna back and forth in her arms, when she saw the roof explode, leaving the monster floating in the air. "Oh, I see I have two suspected people. Usagi and the cat which I've been tracking for years. "Luna, wake up Luna." Luna started opening her eyes and Usagi watched the monster flying slowly closer. Luna got up slowly and looked at Usagi. She did a backflip, and a huge flash occurred revealing a broach. The monster stared for a second. "Oh no, that's not, give it to me!" The monster started to fly towards Usagi as Usagi grabbed it, creating a blinding light. It seemed as timed stopped.

"Mmm. It feels so warm." Usagi looked down to find herself in a blinding white area. She saw a golden mirror and started to walk over to it. There, she looked at herself in the mirror. "What?! What am I wearing?" Usagi looked all over to see she was wearing bows, ribbons, gloves, a tiara, skirt, and earings. "Is this suppose to happen?" She then looked closer at the mirror where insribed where 5 words. "Moon.....Pri-sm...Power...Make...Up" Usagi woke up in regular time before Luna fainted and looked up at the monster which was flying towards her. She grasped the broach, stood up, and shouted these words:

"MOON PRISM POWER, MAKE UP!" Instantaniously, Usagi's old uniform disappeared as she clearly was in nude fashion with colors flashing around her. Ribbons surrounded her torso and created a body suit. Ribbons surrounded her arms and created gloves. Ribbons surrounded her legs and became boots. A skirt appeared, and then accesorries were added. The transformation stopped and she was standing with her new uniform. She closed her eyes as the monster was watching. "I remember." She whispered. "Who and what I am...My purpose." She opened them. To save the world. The monster grabbed Usagi. Usagi looked very puzzled. "WHAT?! Let go of me!" She started beating on the monster as it took her into the sky. As they increased height Usagi's tiara started to flash. It was the voice of Luna. "Usagi, don't struggle. Shout out these words: MOON TIARA ACTION!" "But Luna, I can't, he's" "Just do it!" Luna seemed un-patient from the ground as they passed the big voided dome into the clear blue-sky. Usagi reached for her tiara. "Moon Tiara!" The gem on it sparkled as she held it up like a pizza. "Action!" She drilled it into the monster as a huge "AHHHH!" was heared from the creature. Light was apparent, and the monster was turned into dust. Usagi started to scream as she came down from the sky. "Help Me!" Usagi was getting closer, and as she was about to hit the house, she started to slowly levitate until she hit her bottom. Luna walked over casually as the dark void disappeared. "Usagi, I'll help clean up." Luna's Moon Crecent on her forhead flashed and both of them were back in the room as it was. Clean, neat and organized. Usagi's new uniform was gone, but the broach was placed on her school uniforms' bow. She looked at the bed where the cat was. Luna started to speak as Usagi was still in shock. "You see, Usagi...That was one of the many common demons these evil forces use." The word "common" shook in Usagi's head. "Your joking, right?" Luna shook her head in disapproval. "No, Usagi. It's true." From down below, Usagi's family was heard as they opened the door. "Hey, Usagi, we brought dinner home!" Usagi shouted back. "Okay!" It was around 8:00 PM, and Usagi still hadn't done any of her homework. Usagi sat on the bed and started to do her math when she asked Luna the most important question of the day. "Luna, what were about to say before the demon was about to strike me? I mean, what was with that uniform anyway. Am I a warrior or something?" Luna nodded. "Indeed you are Usagi. A warrior to defend evil." Usagi looked over her shoulder. "What's my name then?" Luna giggled for a second before she spoke upright. "Your name is...."

"Sailor Moon."
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Old 18-07-2003, 11:47 AM   #2   [permalink]
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I started reading this but I had to stop. Here's just a little pointer, when someone else starts talking you should begin a new paragraph.

ie:
Marina turned to Jodi with a questioning look. "Are you serious?" she asked, unsure of whether to be her frined or not.

"Of course I'm serious!" Jodi yelled back.

do you get what I mean? Instead of having the above all in one paragraph, split them up. It makes it easier to read and understand.

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